Comment on the devil's daughter

  1. redcirce on Chapter 2 Wed 14 Oct 2020 06:26PM UTC

    Ran out of space for quotes, I probably shouldn't quote so much but there's so many great lines:

    "He wants to swallow her. Or for her to swallow him. Her fingers reverently trace the constellation of imperfections across his cheek, ending to curl up in the collar of his t-shirt."
    "She grinds her clit against the heel of his hand, the cadence of her rolling hips on his fingers the perfect rhythm against his dick. He can see the confusion developing on Alice Cooper’s face as her daughter fucks herself on his hand, swearing her daughter came home, went to her room, closing the last dresser drawer, the open window, the ladder peeking over the lip of the windowsill innocuous like Hal was just replacing some shingles or cleaning the gutters. Hal doesn’t live here anymore."
    "“Get the hell off my lawn, Jughead Jones!” He must look loopy with love, because Betty does too smiling down at him, her arms draped over the windowsill."
    "The pride in her voice seems to disarm him slightly. He wants to ask exactly what she did to get Chuck’s admission of guilt, but if she doesn’t offer it freely he cannot pry. She is learning his game."
    "Sometimes Jughead gives her that same look. She hates being on his pedestal, but there she remains, unfairly. For Jughead though, even his ideal seems off-kilter, un-kosher, a far cry from socially acceptable, because it feels like he admires, even worships the worst parts of her, as much as she has given freely. But he still doesn’t know all of it. Maybe not even half of it. Her mother once gifted her with a rare piece of good advice. You should trust him, just not with everything. "

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    1. meditationonbaaal on Chapter 2 Fri 16 Oct 2020 08:08PM UTC

      And I had other plans for Chuck later down the road that I scrapped. You can only have so many villains in a story, which is one show’s biggest pitfalls. Pick a few and stick with them, guys.

      Jughead has a bunch of ulterior motives for conning Betty into spending time together. There is a lot more going on with the Jason Blossom murder here, and I know it takes me a very, very, very long time to get to the climax. I – urgh, I don’t want to give too much away.

      But, that is the running theme throughout this story, which you hit the nail on the head. When you have the sort of background that Jughead and Betty have here, it’s difficult to have any self-awareness of your emotions and feelings about really anything, whether they are correct or valid. Sometimes objectively they seem terrible and make you a bad person even if they make you feel good. Sometimes objectively they are wholesome and healthy, but you’ve been conditioned to think most of your self, your wants and needs and actions, are incorrect and wrong, so it gets flipped upside down. There’s almost no winning. And that’s why it takes ages for them to get together here; it almost seems like they shouldn’t be able to, but there’s this inevitable pull. Sometimes that inevitable pull leads you to someone who is actually awful for you. Sometimes it leads you to someone who ends up being good for you. Let’s hope it’s the latter for these two. Sorry, that was a ramble.

      This chapter was supposed to be the first glimpse that Betty might not mind Jug’s stalking, but no one really knows why until we get through the entire story up to chapter 11/12. I’ve never drawn something out over such a long period in my life, and I applaud you for sticking with it. Sometimes it feels unbelievably tedious to me, but I hope it is worth it in the end!

      I really appreciate you taking the time to drop a comment as you go along. Please don’t feel like you need to, though!

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      1. redcirce on Chapter 2 Sat 17 Oct 2020 04:57AM UTC

        I really appreciate you taking the time to drop a comment as you go along. Please don’t feel like you need to, though!

        The first time around, I didn't find this fic until I think 10 or so chapters were up, so I ended up leaving just one or two comments. I figured with it being reposted, it was a chance to both reread so I'd have a fresh memory before I read the update, but actually comment on each chapter. Tedious is the last word I'd use to describe this fic, honestly. It's one of my favorites in all of fandom, and I figure as long as author's like getting feedback the least I can do is take a few minutes to share my thoughts on something that takes so much time, effort and creativity.

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